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OUT OF TOWN OBSERVATIONS

[FlashXer] EXERCISE: TUESDAY, APRIL 1, 2008

Yesterday was opening day in this country. And the sound of the bat and the ball were heard, like a siren, throughout the land. So, lets work on that for he story today... write a baseball story.

TAKE ME OUT TO THE OLD BALL GAME...BATTER UP! PLAY BALL!

Usual rules. 1000 words. In the subject line, please, your name the word Ball Game and the story title.
Get with it. Damn it ump, you're blind as a bat....
It's a good pitch.
Have fun.
Irv.


04/01/08 Janine's Ball Game "Out of Town Observations" 167 words

"Mmmm... This stuff is good. What do they call it again?" Hip asked Jod.

"I think they call it roasted peanuts. They have those long things in some type of wheat based product. I think they call those hot dogs." said Jod.

"I wonder if the dogs mind being eaten." said Hip.

"I think they are not the same as the furry beasts that seem to run this place." said Jod.

"Now why do the furry beasts exercise their men by having them hit the sphere and run around the square?" asked Hip.

Jod replied, "I think it is so they can keep track of them during their time outside. Notice the fencing to keep them contained. The furry beasts have their hands full training their men with this practice they call catch."

"I guess the furry beasts have a long way to go training these men before we are ready to take them to the home planet, Bazor. Let's check back in another hundred earth turns to see their progress."



04/01/08
Hi Janine,

Interesting take on the prompt. No doubt all that stuff looks strange to aliens. It probably would look just as strange to a human tribe that had never left the Amazon.

I wondered who Bazor was. Name of a planet or being? I think there's a word missing in the sentence which mentions Bazor.

Regards, Mike


04/02/08
Hiya Janine,
An odd sort of little piece. I always wondered how golf must look to space aliens. I've sat watching cricket in London and Sydney, felt a bit like an alien myself. It's confusing! Anyway, there are two of them, your stories I mean. Are you an out of control ... SERIAL SUBMITTER?
And is Bazor their planet? You omitted the word "to?"
R.R.



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