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THE JOY RIDE

[FlashXer] EXERCISE: SUNDAY, OCTOBER 12, 2008

In days gone by, not too long ago, today would be Columbus Day...but in the new scheme of things the Holiday won't be until tomorrow. I wonder what Chris would have thought if he found the new world the way it is now. Imagine his disbelief if he sailed his three windjammers into NY Harbor to see the Lady standing there, and then found the busy streets of Manhattan. That might be a subject for a novel. I won't write it, but if you want to, I wish you well. Just let your imagination roam, and write the reverse of a Conneticut Yankee...An Italian Sailor/explorer discovers a really new world....or something like that. Just an idea...

IT WAS A CLASSIC SINGLE VEHICLE CRASH. 3 PASSENGERS IN FRONT AND BACK WERE DEAD: BUT THERE WAS NO ONE IN THE DRIVER'S SEAT....

Usual rules: 1000 words. In the subject line, please, your name, the word Crash and the story title. Gear up, go take a ride, but be damn sure you know who is driving.
Have fun
Irv


10/13/08 Janine's Crash "The Joy Ride" 141 words

"Look! Call 911! That car just hit the tree," yelled Steve.

Steve saw a glow of light from inside the car.

"Greetings, Steve," said the glowing light as it floated out of the car.

"What's going on? How do you know my name?" said Steve.

"Shhh... don't tell anyone you saw me. My dad doesn't want to know about another joy ride gone bad. I'll be in touch." said the glowing light as it floated into the atmosphere.

Steve stood in shock as the emergency response crew arrived. He was questioned, but had no information on where the driver of the car was. The other three people in the car were all dead.

A few days later... "Hey, Steve! Do you want to go for a joy ride? I'll find the car," said the glowing ball of light.

Steve politely declined.


10/13/08
Hi Janine,

Interesting tale. I just wondered how the glowing ball of light knew the observer was named Steve. But then I guess the spirits know all. Heh-heh.

I didn't cite anything in your manuscript.

Regards, Mike


10/13/08
Hi Janine,
Interesting very short story. Just a couple of questions... So was the glowing ball of light a ghost before the crash if not where did the body go? Was Steve a teenager that the light thought to entice into a joy ride? -Rita



10/13/08
Hi Janine,
Interesting story. I liked the way you personified the glowing light. Good job!
Linda


10/15/08
This is a neat little tale, Janine. Good ending. The mystery surrounding the glowing orb snags the reader's interest immediately. Nothing to cite in your manuscript.
Harriett



10/16/08
Hi janine,
Your story was short and to the point. No crit.
Hal
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06/30/09
Hi Janine,

Good to hear from you again. Thanks for the five new pieces. Great stuff!

I have added the set to your section of the Site and updated your bio at: http://www.short-humour.org.uk/writersshowcase/writersshowcase.htm#JAB.

The new stories are at: http://www.short-humour.org.uk/writersshowcase/anotherfiveflashfictionstories.htm.

Let me know if anything needs to be changed.

Best wishes,

Brian.





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