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SOME PEOPLE'S KIDS
[FlashXer] EXERCISE: MARCH 21, 2008
It is a few minutes before 8 in the AM, here in New Jersey, and I have
been sitting here thinking about where to begin today's sounding off.
That's what this is for me, sounding off. And to be absolutely candid,
my mind is a fairly blank state. So, to hell with it. Make up your
own morning rant...but after you have done the prompt for today.
Here it is...it is up to you....
DON'T TAKE MY WORD FOR IT, CHECK IT OUT
Usual rules. 1000 words. In the subject line, please, your name
the word Don't and the story title. Get to it. Make the most of
it. Before you know it April, with showers sweet will be here
and you'll be able to cook outside.
Have fun
Irv
03/22/08 Janine's Don't "Some People's Kids" 77 words
"Honest, Mom, I'm not lying. It's really true. Come look!" Hank pulled at his mother's apron.
Outside the kitchen door was a metal sphere the size of a VW Bug hovering over the swing set.
Hank's mom fainted on the spot. The shock was too much for her.
Hank and Fizzle spent the afternoon swinging and talking about their parents and what they liked to do when their parents were too busy to pay attention to them.
03/22/08
Absolutely the cutest thing I've read in a long time. This could really be a longer story. And a great illustrated children's book! Have you ever read Bruce Coville? His Space Brat stories remind me of this, loosely. His stories are quite different but very popular and I think this one could be another winner!
Suzanne Bogue
03/22/08
Hiya,
A weather balloon! Um,... a very neat little helicopter with the rotors spinning so that they weren't visable. Um,... a volkswagon in flight because of a lousy driver and suspended momentarily due to... irk! I'm running out of ideas here. If you say space ship, I'll scream. I'm in a quiet library so they'll probably kick me out, so it's on your head.
Thanks for the critique. I'm not sure whats up with the bouncing of e-mail. I hope none of my other e-mail is getting bounced. Wonder what causes it? Um,... alien invaders?
R.R.
PS: I'm cursing too much in these little bitty pieces. I'll try to cool it with that.
03/22/08
Hi Janine. Cute little tale.
Regards, Mike
03/23/08
Janine,
Cute little story. Only one little crit. I assume by
the oddness of his name that Fizzle was an alien child
who had been in the hovering VW Bug. If this is so,
then maybe a mention of his in front of his ship or
hovering with it or something like that would make
this more clear. All the same, I really like this
story.
connie
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