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THE INNER MONSTER
[FlashXer] EXERCISE: SUNDAY, FEBRUARY 24, 2008
IT'S DONE, DAMNIT, IT'S A FAIT ACCOMPLI.
NO WAY YOU CAN CHANGE THINGS.
Okay, so I failed to write an intro this morning. My brain is mush...
and i can't think of a thing to write that won't be completely banal.
If you got a complaint about that, sue me.
Usual rules apply. 1000 words. In the subject, line, please,
your name, the words fait accompli and the story title.
Get with it. Maybe on Tuesday I'll have an inspiration and be able to
write
a whole damn book before the prompt. We'll see.
Have fun.
Irv.
2/24/08 Janine's Fait Accompli "The Inner Monster" 99 words
"It's done! That's final!" said the angry instructor.
"But I know I can do better if you just give me time to redo that last test." Said the student with this class standing in the way of graduation.
"I'm sorry. There is nothing that can be done. You will have to repeat the course." Said the instructor as he turned away from the student.
GRRRROOOOWWWWWLLLLLL... CRUNCH...
With his back turned, the teacher never saw it coming. The student was too frustrated for words, so he turned himself into his true monster form and ate his teacher in one bite.
02/24/08
Hi Janine.
Fun story. This guy could rent himself out to students seeking revenge.
I made a couple comments.
Regards, Mike
THE INNER MONSTER by Janine Bouyssounouse 99 words
"It's done! That's final!" said the angry instructor.
"But I know I can do better if you just give me time to redo that last test." Said the student with this class standing in the way of graduation.
"I'm sorry. There is nothing that can be done. You will have to repeat the course." Said the instructor as he turned away from the student. @@@ Something to consider. Whether or not the instructor turned away is nonessential to the plot. @@@
GRRRROOOOWWWWWLLLLL L... CRUNCH... @@@ This long, extended word threw me out of the story as I grappled with it’s pronunciation. @@@
With his back turned, the teacher never saw it coming. The student was too frustrated for words, so he turned himself into his true monster form and ate his teacher in one bite. @@@ Nicely weird. @@@
2/26/08
Hi Janine,
I love this little story. My son is trying to deal
with freshman college courses and he's a special needs
kid and there have been more than one teacher that I
felt like turning into a monster and attack. Just a
bit of a nit. In the second sentence, the word "said"
shouldn't be capitalized and the end of the sentence
after the word "with" is confusing. Also, it would add
a bit if you named the class. It could be a dreaded
statistics class or something like PE.
Thanks for the fun read.
Connie
2/26/08
Very fun - one question though: Did the exam have anything to do with the
student's ability to shapeshift/release his inner monster? I almost had
that impression, but wasn't sure. -Corie
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