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ONE AND ONE

[FlashXer] Prompt: Sunday, October 26, 2008

Good morning! I am a bit groggy. We had to break up a dog fight about 3 AM and it took awhile for the nerves to settle afterward. Fortunately, the dogs were wearing muzzles, so neither were injured. I suffered some scratched on my face when the lab tried to escape from me, but I am fine.

The line I have chosen is the first line in Michael Kimball's book, Green Girls. I think it has many possibilities.

The prompt for today is: A great time to figure things out. In the subject line, Your Name, the word Figure and your stories title, please.

Thank you and good writing. ...Rita

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10/30/08 Janine's Figure "One And One" 69 words

"Watcha doin', Freddy?" said Sam.

"I'm figuring somethin' out. Don't bug me."

Okay, I was just wondering what the writing and erasing was all about."

"Sam, at school they say that one and one is two."

"Yeah. So what?"

"I have a new baby cousin, so when Aunt Peg and Uncle Trip got together, they made three. Do you think one and one is really three instead of two?"

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10/30/08
Dear Janine,

A cute little piece. Your dialogue has really improved!

Jim

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10/30/08
Cute story, Janine. It's exactly the kind of thing a little kid would think of. I thought maybe one sentence was a little too adult sounding, but now I think it's just me over thinking it@@@Okay, I was just wondering what the writing and erasing was all about."@@@. Other than that, nothing to cite in your manuscript.
Well done!
Harriett

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10/31/08
Hi Janine,

Funny and to the point. Good take on the prompt. -Rita

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