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IT'S TIME
[FlashXer] EXERCISE: TUESDAY, JANUARY 29, 2008
BAck to something standard, instead of the ponderously long
prompt that Angela Hoy used for he 24 hour. I don't know
which may be easier to write to,m but I sorta suspect this may be.
At any rate, you will only know if you try. So try this prompt
for today.
OKAY, HONEY IT'S TIME
Usual rules. 1000 words. In the subject line, please the word
Okay, and then your name and the story title.
Its time you gave this your all.
Get to it.
Have fun
Irv
Janine's Okay "It's Time" 84 words
"Okay honey. It's time." Said Jillian.
"Hmmmm? Time for what, dear?" Said Frank.
"I'm not going to take your forgetfulness as an excuse, honey." Said Jillian.
"What? I can't hear you, dear. You're going to have to speak up." Said Frank.
Jillian lit Frank's newspaper on fire with the cannon-shaped cigarette lighter.
Frank stomped on the newspaper, leaving a scorch mark on the rug. Then he watched as the water ran down his wife's leg, letting him know the baby was on the way.
1/30/08
Hi Janine,
Clever. Humorous. She was as blase about this as he was.
Regards, Mike
2/3/08
Hi Janine,
Grinned at the end of this one :)
Nice! Nice setting and good visual demo at the end.
Just a few comments. (in the text)
thanks for a good read,
best,
Joan
sunshine99@Safe-mail.net wrote: IT'S TIME by Janine Bouyssounouse 84 words
"Okay honey. It's time." ***Said*** maybe 'whispered' to set the stage for Frank not being able to hear her*** Jillian.
"Hmmmm? Time for what, dear?" Said Frank.
"I'm not going to take your forgetfulness as an excuse, honey." Said Jillian.
"What? I can't hear you, dear. You're going to have to speak up." Said Frank.
Jillian lit Frank's newspaper on fire with the cannon-shaped cigarette lighter.
***love this bit. hahaha***
Frank stomped on the newspaper, leaving a scorch mark on the rug. Then he watched as the water ran down his wife's leg, letting him know the baby was on the way. ***good end***
2/12/08
Hi Janine,
I don't like Frank. Now, Jillian, I like. She is so
calm at such a stressful situation and yet was able to
keep her cool and burn his newspaper. This is a fun
little story. I do wonder if Frank would realize that
his wife's water broke and not that she was peeing. He
seems the type not to know such things.
Connie
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