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YES, DEAR
[FlashXer] EXERCISE: FRIDAY, NOVEMBER 8, 2008
Al Gore must be right. The weather is krazy. This morning it was a
brisk 28 degrees when
I checked and that is crazy when you consider what it has been in my
part of the woods.
So, I shall be sure to bundle up. Last evening my bride and I went
to the local
PBS station whee they recognized those veterans who wrote something
for their
effort to have short memoirs submitted and published. Ken Burns' co-
producer (and wife I believe)
spoke about the making of the WAR, and it was very interesting
indeed. One of he things
they are doing there, at WHYY--OUR PBS STATION--is putting together
an audio record of
people's stories, but normal and war related. Our stories were all
recorded by station personnel,
and the CD's were given to us. I haven't listened yet, but I am sure
they are interesting and
good to have. But, if you have parents and grand parents and even
great grand parents still
living, you should consider recording their recollections. I have
some memoir from my folks,
but much is forgotten. What was it like in Russia in 1905, I wonder.
It would be nice to have
my Dad's comments, but unfortunately we never did get them on tape.
Oh well, just a thought.
And you, as a writer might consider writing your own memoir: even the
story of how you skinned
your knee, or fell out of the apple tree, might be a part of your
family history worth preserving.
Dontcha think?
HEY, YOU DON'T NEED MY PERMISSION, BUT I APPROVE
Usual rules. 1000 words. In the subject line, please, your name, the
word
Permission and the story title.
You don't need my approval, but if it makes you feel better., you
have it.
Now that you have a security blanket, start writing...and have fun,
fun, fun.
Irv
Janine's Permission "Yes, dear." 109 words
"Irv, I'm going to start a fabric store for quilters."
"Yes, dear."
"I've worked with a lady from the Small Business Association who made projections that show a profit."
"Yes, dear."
"Based on our calculations, the initial investment can be returned in two years and after that the real profit begins."
"Yes, dear."
"I just need to call the stock broker to sell some stock."
"Yes, dear."
KABOOM! The entire stack of fabric and notions catalogs is now covering the table.
"I just told you you're retiring early and living off of my entrepreneurial efforts. Do I have your permission?!"
"Hey, you don't need my permission, but I approve."
Hi Janine.
Humorous.
Here's a nit. Consider changing the sentence after KABOOM to past tense.
Regards, Mike Kechula
11/09/07
Hi Janine:
I'm not quite sure what is happening here (see below). Did he slap his hand
on the table or something, causing the pile of stuff to fall.
A couple more comments below also.
Enjoyed reading.
Margaret
YES, DEAR 109 words Janine Bouyssounouse
"Irv, I'm going to start a fabric store for quilters."
"Yes, dear."
"I've worked with a lady from the Small Business Association who made
projections that show a profit."
"Yes, dear."
"Based on our calculations, the initial investment can be returned in two
years and after that the real profit begins." ***or should it be "the real
profits begin"? I'm not sure.***
"Yes, dear."
"I just need to call the stock broker to sell some stock." ***suggest: "I
just need to call our broker to sell some stock." No need to use "stock"
twice in one sentence***
"Yes, dear."
KABOOM! The entire stack of fabric and notions catalogs is now covering the
table. ***I'm a little lost here. Did a pile of catalogs, etc. fall over.
What caused it to do so?***
"I just told you you're retiring early and living off of my entrepreneurial
efforts. Do I have your permission?!"
"Hey, you don't need my permission, but I approve."
11/09/07
Nice take on the prompt, Janine, but I don't quite understand the ending.
What was the KABOOM?
Harriett
11/10/07
Hi
Not sure what's happening at:
KABOOM! The entire stack of fabric and notions catalogs is now covering the
table.
Maybe give us HOW and WHY?
Glorry
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