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INTERMISSION
[FlashXer] EXERCISE: SUNDAY, APRIL 20, 2008
As with any creative endeavor--and sometimes coming up with
prompts may be so considered, I think the juices just don't flow.
So, recently I've been flopping around like a flounder in the bottom of
a skiff...but I think the one today will work. You'll let me know by
your
output, of course. And, if you follow this one, you may be somewhat
earthy...if you so choose. I hope you are all up to this challenge....
WHAT'S YOUR PLEASURE DARLING...SHALL WE EAT FIRST, OR?
Usual rules. 1000 words. In he subject line, please, your name, the
word Pleasure and the story title.
Have fun with this. Writing to it might turn out to be a real pleasure.
Please pass me the ?
Irv
04/20/08 Janine's Pleasure "INTERMISSION" 62 words
"What's your pleasure, Darling? Shall we eat first, or?" Rob had that look in his eye.
The raise of the eye brows and those bedroom eyes was Meg's response.
There were a couple of hours of pleasure seeking in various locations in the house.
Panting and sweating, Meg said, "I do believe eating is an intermission activity, my dear. Cheese and grapes?"
04/20/08
Cute story. Though my mind must be slow, because I
couldn't figure out what cheese and grapes had to do
with the story. Duh, silly me. -Rita
4/28/08
Janine,
What a pleasurable 'intermission'. Clever dialog that said volumes with only 62 words. Nice. I've made some comments/nits, see embedded. Use or lose as suits your writer's voice. A fun read just before bedtime. Thanks,
Sharon
INTERMISSION by Janine Bouyssounouse 62 words
"What's your pleasure, Darling? Shall we eat first, or?" Rob had that look in his eye.
The raise of the
### Consider using 'her' instead of 'the' ###
eye brows and those
### instead of 'those' perhaps 'come-on' . ###
bedroom eyes was Meg's response.
There were
### Instead of 'There were', perhaps 'What followed was ...' ###
a couple of hours of pleasure seeking in various locations in the house.
Panting and sweating, Meg said, "I do believe eating is an intermission activity, my dear. Cheese and grapes?"
### And don't forget the wine! ###
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INTERMISSION
By Janine Bouyssounouse
"What's your pleasure, darling? Shall we eat first, or...?" Rob had that
look in his eye.
The raise of the eye brows and those bedroom eyes were Meg's response.
There were a couple of hours of pleasure seeking in various locations in the
house.
Panting and sweating, Meg said, "I do believe eating is an intermission
activity, my dear. Cheese and grapes?"
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Janine Bouyssounouse is toning up her writing skills with flash fiction to
improve her educational materials. For more info, see her website at
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10/10/08
Congratulations on having your story ("Intermission") published in Flashhot,
Janine! Way to go!
Harriett
10/10/08
Hi Janine,
Congratulations!!! I remember this story from the group. Good job! -Rita
10/12/08
Janine,
Sharp, erotic and breathless. What more could a reader want. Congrats! Well done,
Sharon
10/13/08
Congrats, Janine! It was a fun read. : )
Catherine
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