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WHAT A BOTHER
[FlashXer] EXERCISE: TUESDAY, MAY 27, 2008
When Iu came upon the word uncouple in he paper this morning, It
impressed me. It seems to be a fairly fresh way to say divorce. So, I
worked a prompt around it. I hope you will agree that it is an
interesting
change from the normal. At any rate, I think you might have enough
here to
develop a good tale. So, see what you can do.
IT'S BEEN A ROCKY MARRIAGE. CHEATING, LYING, EVEN STEALING.
NO WONDER THEY ARE ABOUT TO UNCOUPLE.
Usual rules. 1000 words. In he subject line, please, your name the
word uncouple
and the story title. Thinking about it , you could even write a tail
about
the Old Grey Mare...and the whipple tree. But remember what the mare
did to that
there whipple tree...
Have fun
Irv
05/27/08 Janine's Uncouple "What A Bother" 102 words
"Shall we uncouple, my dear?" said Harold with his nose in the newspaper.
"Why would you ever mention such an ugly proposition?" said Eunice.
"I have known every parlor maid we have ever had. I was thinking it might be a burdon to you for others to know of it." answered Harold.
"But dear, I thought we had the perfect arrangement. I have known every stable boy and butler we have ever employed. I rather thought you preferred it this way." said Eunice.
Harold turned the page of the newspaper and replied, "Perhaps you are right, my dear. You always know best."
05/27/08
Hi Janine. Cute little anecdotal work that fits the prompt to a T.
Regards, Mike
05/27/08
Cute story. They are the perfect couple in an open
marriage. Just one thing below. -Rita
WHAT A BOTHER by Janine Bouyssounouse 102 words
"Shall we uncouple, my dear?" said Harold with his
nose in the newspaper.
"Why would you ever mention such an ugly
proposition?" said Eunice.
"I have known every parlor maid we have ever had. I
was thinking it might be a bourdon @@@I think you
mean burden@@@ to you for others
to know of it." answered Harold.
"But dear, I thought we had the perfect arrangement.
I have known every stable boy and butler we have
ever employed. I rather thought you preferred it
this way." said Eunice.
Harold turned the page of the newspaper and replied,
"Perhaps you are right, my dear. You always know
best."
05/28/08
Hi Janine,
This made me chuckle.
And it has to go to a humor publication. (yes, why not Short humor.org. Since all of us flashxers are setting up home there :)
I thoroughly enjoyed this satire.
No nits. Oh, only a spelling - burden, instead of bourdon.
Best,
Joan
05/28/08
Janine,
I like your writing, but for some reason, I guess because I can be so thick, I don't quite get this one. No real criticism here other than that. What am I missing?
Suzanne
05/29/08
Wow, A flash out of the seventies. Enjoyable story Janine.
Hal
06/30/09
Hi Janine,
Good to hear from you again. Thanks for the five new pieces. Great stuff!
I have added the set to your section of the Site and updated your bio at:
http://www.short-humour.org.uk/writersshowcase/writersshowcase.htm#JAB.
The new stories are at:
http://www.short-humour.org.uk/writersshowcase/anotherfiveflashfictionstories.htm.
Let me know if anything needs to be changed.
Best wishes,
Brian.
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